- Redundancies -
To achieve clear writing, we must first find and remove redundancies. There is an art to using just the right number of words. When we succeed at this art, our sentences are free of words that obscure our ideas and mislead the reader. Watch for the common errors shown below:
We must complete the orientation effort before departing for Malebo Pool.
We must complete the orientation before departing for Malebo Pool.
Even in the rapids they continued their rowing action.
Even in the rapids they continued their rowing.
On the pier in Kinshasa, Panga manages the operations function.
On the pier in Kinshasa, Panga manages the operations.
Plants on the shoreline can be used for food purposes.
Plants on the shoreline can be used for food.
Several townships have funded work in flood control.
Several townships have funded flood control.
Note how the sentences become shorter and more vigorous. By removing deadwood, our sentences are more readable. We avoid dulling the impact of the message, and we keep the reader's interest.
Also note that deleting words can sometimes leave ambiguity in the meaning of a sentence. In this case, leave the words in for clarity.