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Depending on which Chinese person you ask, the Yangtze River might be called Ta Jiang (Great River), or Chang Jiang (Long River), or even Chin-sha Jiang (The River of Gold Sand). This is an illustration of the peculiar Chinese custom for naming anything and everything. In the Wushan gorges, a boat captain might wave to The Seated Woman and the Pouncing Lion or steer carefully through The Ox-Liver and Horse-Lung Gorge. Every rock and cliff has a name, and each name contains a hint at a unique story.
- Weak Verbs -
We use many other verbs to weaken sentences. For example, verbs that convey the concept of belonging often bloat a verb. The belonging verbs such as have, include, and contain can be removed in favor of lean expressions. Our opening paragraph shows an example:
Every rock and cliff has a name, and each name contains a hint at a unique story.
This sentence would be more direct and meaningful if the verb were allowed to speak out by itself:
Every rock and cliff has a name, and each name hints at a unique story.
Other examples follow:
Normally, the Yangtze will have a discharge of 35,000 cubic meters per second.
Normally, the Yangtze will discharge at 35,000 cubic meters per second.
Their folklore has an effect on the naming conventions.
Their folklore affects the naming conventions.
Meng included a description of the Ta Jiang in his story.
Meng described the Ta Jiang in his story.